2015考研英语看图作文范例点评：充电学习

看图作文在英语作文中是大家普遍缺乏练习的一种类型，一个提高的方式就是看范例和点评，针对其中的错误进行自我修正。

充电学习：

写作原文

There is no doubt that the two cartoons vividly demonstrate a positive and ubiquitous scenario in modern society: increasing number of people go to miscellanelous(拼写错误，改为miscellaneous) training programs. A majority of people, with smile on faces, swarm into English classes and attend the lectures about WTO. What is conveyed(建议改为conveys) by the drawings is both inspiring and illuminating. What might account for this mushrooming phenomenon? Several points analyzed below may equip us with deeper comprehending of what we head for. First things first, the rapid development of economy has been accompanied with a corresponding of fierce competition. Therefore, many people prefer to attend some lectures about their careers, in the desire to(改为and want to,文中in the desire to表示“在欲望中建立”) keep abreast of the latest development of technology. In addition, the constant international communication stimulates people to endeavor themselves to learn something which is beyond their majors, thus subjecting the increasing challenges to their own minds(改为thus they may challenge themselves and broaden their knowledge). Last but not least, the desire for studying signifies the pursuit of individuality. From what has been mentioned above, we can safely conclude that if we are ever going to survive(加in) the harsh society, we must persist in learning new skills and knowledge. Only in this way can make us(改为we make ourselves to be) perfect candidates for a promising future.

总体点评

整体来说，文章写得不错;但还存在个别简单的语法错误。作者在写作完之后若可以花费几分钟时间来回读文章，便会减少不必要的错误。考研作文的整体思路你已经基本掌握，后面要做的就是多积累高分佳句，为自己的文章增彩;再者，写完之后一定要认真检查，减少失分点。

参考分数(满分20分)：15

英语写作水平的提升需要不断地练习，在改正错误中不断取得进步，不怕犯错误，怕明知道犯错误却不面对。看了范文和点评，希望大家有思考，有提高。