2017年12月英语六级作文点评：三套全（沪江网校版）

一套卷：

Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write an essay commenting on the saying “Help others and you will be helped when you are in need” You can cite example to illustrate your views. You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words.

六级模板普通版

总字数：185

The rapid development of today's society has aroused a heated discussion as to whether we should help others in the society. Views on the topic vary greatly among people from different walks of life, among which there goes a well-known saying: "Help others and you will be helped when you are in need", suggesting that we should try to help others kindly.

I totally agree with this saying for the reasons presented below. First, it is good for the whole society because if everyone in the society can give a hand to each other, it is more likely that the society will become more peaceful. Second, it is good for the person himself / herself. For example, if a person tries to help others when they have trouble, when he needs help, he can get help from other people. So, I totally agree with this saying.

From my perspective, it is crucial that modern education should encourage people to support each other. Also it is crucial that people should understand the meaning and value of helping each other. Only in this way can they build a harmonious society.

解析

文体：本次的作文是大家所熟悉的“论说文”，需要考生去评价一个观点并给出自己的理由。

审题：客观来说论说文，对观点的评价正反两面皆可，但这里并不建议从反面写，因为给出的观点“Help others and you will be helped when you are in need”本身是非常正能量的，因此如果非要从反面着手，难度就比较大，很难做到自圆其说。

结构：论说文的结构是非常清晰的。在沪江网校的四六级写作课中已经提得非常明确了“龙头凤尾，中间结构清晰”，在开头一段，亮出观点，引入主题；在中间结构部分，牢记“清晰”二字，利用举例丰富所要论说的观点，善于使用关系词理清逻辑结构关系，做到层次分明。在收尾部分，则要做到深化主旨，再次强调观点的正确性，可以说就是非常棒了。

二套卷：

Seek to understand others, and you will be understood

六级模板普通版

总字数：189

"Seek to understand others, and you will be understood" The enlightenment of this saying is not lost in our era but unwilling to understand others seems prevalent. The implication of this message is that people can understand each other as long as they try to do this first ; there are, in fact, many who get understood by others because they manage to understand others first.

There are several factors to be taken into account when we agree on “seek to understand others, and will be understood”: One reason is that trying to understand others can show your kindness to others. Other people would be thankful, so it is easier for them to accept your ideas. On the other hand, it will let you think what other people think so that you can get to know them better. Therefore, your ideas would have a greater chance to be understood.

When we seek to understand others, we elevate the goodwill and team-work spirit. There is a stimulative effect that kicks in when people share this spirit. By seeking to understand others, we boost opportunity for fulfilling understanding between each other.

解析

文体：本次的作文是大家所熟悉的“论说文”，需要考生去评价一个观点并给出自己的理由。

审题：客观来说论说文，对观点的评价正反两面皆可，但这里并不建议从反面写，因为给出的观点“Seek to understand others, and you will be understood”本身是非常正能量的，因此如果非要从反面着手，难度就比较大，很难做到自圆其说。

结构：论说文的结构是非常清晰的。在沪江网校的四六级写作课中已经提得非常明确了“龙头凤尾，中间结构清晰”，在开头一段，亮出观点，点明现状，并且可以直接在首段就对观点给予认同，这样的好处在于在中间结构部分，就可以围绕“原因”做文章了，还是牢记逻辑思路要清晰，善于使用关联词。在结尾部分，可以再次强调观点的正确性，对观点进行一定程度的升华。

三套卷：Respect others, and others will respect you

六级高分版

总字数：185

"You reap what you sow." The wisdom of this saying is not lost in our era, especially when it comes torespecting others, yet arrogance seems rife nowadays. The implication of this message is, in the case of respect, that if you respect others, you will be respected in return.

Respecting others is rewarding in three aspects. First, from a social standpoint, it enhances mutual understanding and reduces the chance of conflicts between people with different beliefs because it urges people to think in others' shoes before criticizing their opinions thereby preventing impulsive conflicts. Moreover, it benefits the respectful person himself as well. Respecting others helps him to calm down and take a deeper insight into his own ideas, which means he is more likely to think in the big picture. Finally, we should always bear in mind that respect is earned with respect, not arrogance or threat.

When we respect others, we earn respect from others as well. There is a stimulative effect that kicks in when people stay humble and respect diversity. By respecting and harnessing each other's strengths, we boost opportunity for all people.

解析

文体：本次的作文是大家所熟悉的“论说文”，需要考生去评价一个观点并给出自己的理由。

审题：客观来说论说文，对观点的评价正反两面皆可，但这里并不建议从反面写，因为给出的观点“Respect others, and others will respect you”本身是非常正能量的，因此如果非要从反面着手，难度就比较大，很难做到自圆其说。

结构：论说文的结构是非常清晰的。在沪江网校的四六级写作课中已经提得非常明确了“龙头凤尾，中间结构清晰”，在开头一段，亮出观点，点明现状，积累丰富的同学甚至可以找到一句真正的名人名言来增强观点的说服力。（当然直接套用原句也是可以接受的）。在中间部分最重要的还是理清逻辑思路，善用关系词以及从句，最好做到用词的精炼。在结尾部分，对观点进行一定的补充说明，将影响升华到一定的高度，可以让文章整体立体起来。